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06/11/2018 8:10 pm  

Pick one out 

Craig

I walked out

Waved

Focused

I locked

Landed

Inside

Coach yelled for me 

Like a raging bull

Nice shot

I tagged

Scored

Game open 

Keep the game alive

Battery Brothers

By Steve Carman Pg 11

This topic was modified 9 months ago by dcraig

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06/11/2018 8:13 pm  

i feel like the flow isn't quite there but i do like how descriptive the line "like a raging bull" is.


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06/11/2018 8:39 pm  

What is the title of the novel?  This seemed like a news story about the Golden State Warriors.  Good fun.


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09/11/2018 7:32 pm  

It' s good but 1 question was it a basketball game, or a hit 'n' run. 💣  💣  💣  🌼  🍹  🍺  🍺  🍺  🍺  💣  💣  💣  🤕  🤕  🤕  😱  😱  😱  🌼  🌹  🥀 


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09/11/2018 7:32 pm  

It' s good but 1 question was it a basketball game, or a hit 'n' run. 💣  💣  💣  🌼  🍹  🍺  🍺  🍺  🍺  💣  💣  💣  🤕  🤕  🤕  😱  😱  😱  🌼  🌹  🥀 


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09/11/2018 7:32 pm  

It' s good but 1 question was it a basketball game, or a hit 'n' run. 💣  💣  💣  🌼  🍹  🍺  🍺  🍺  🍺  💣  💣  💣  🤕  🤕  🤕  😱  😱  😱  🌼  🌹  🥀 


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13/11/2018 8:18 pm  

what does this even mean craig 😆  😆  😆 


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