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A disaster  

 

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07/11/2018 9:41 pm  

A disaster stands, looking at the clock, wipes his mouth Dad he calls out I just ignore I wipe my face trying to to smooth stress away I just know so much. The bedroom I hear information I know I’m paranoid, Don’t talk to them I hear the door the sound of boots the outer door cracking and slamming shut the little window their vehicles. 


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08/11/2018 7:31 pm  

good job except there is more than 4 words in some lines


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08/11/2018 7:33 pm  

I didnt relly know what was hapening  🤣  👍 


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08/11/2018 7:34 pm  

It's good but it sounds like his parents are getting a divorce  ❤️  💣  💣  💣  🤯 


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08/11/2018 7:34 pm  

It's good but it sounds like his parents are getting a divorce  ❤️  💣  💣  💣  🤯 


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09/11/2018 7:37 pm  

the words weren't random, which is good.

although i did not like how it was formatted down


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13/11/2018 8:17 pm  

what does it mean


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