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06/11/2018 6:24 pm  

Streaming Out

Chaos. They are
so loud
so loud

I remember mom
. . . a black car
Blake yelling
. . . a black four-door

Lost in description:
gray inside
softly imagining
the abduction.

After dark
for days
calling you
but you were
so pissed
so sad

--T.A. Sukany 06 Nov 2018
Found Poem from McMann, Lisa. Dead to You. page 68


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06/11/2018 6:56 pm  

I enjoyed that it was a strong story line and I could picture what was going on


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06/11/2018 7:01 pm  

Very nice! i love how much detail there is.


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06/11/2018 7:03 pm  

I like how your poem has a topic that flows throughout.


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06/11/2018 7:04 pm  

Very nicely written. Could picture what was going on.


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06/11/2018 7:05 pm  

As I'm reading this, I see it in my mind. Nice job!


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06/11/2018 7:10 pm  

A lot of emotion in this poem which really drew me in.


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06/11/2018 7:10 pm  

It was great! I like the detail that was in this!


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06/11/2018 7:11 pm  

The whole poem flows through and I can picture whats happening in my head. Good job!


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06/11/2018 7:15 pm  

Very nice details, enjoyed it very much.


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09/11/2018 6:37 pm  

I liked how much your poem grabbed attention and made me want to know more. 


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09/11/2018 6:41 pm  

I like the way you worded the poem wonderful lots of passion good job!


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