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06/11/2018 7:10 pm  

Feeling cold wetness, shyness, dissipated, familiarity.

She drops and grins. 

She knows because of her position.

up two steps a door to the house.

everyone scoots past me.

My head is stone.

Dirty bowls with food we left.

we got that you were hungry.


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06/11/2018 7:17 pm  

Very nice details


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06/11/2018 7:31 pm  

Not sure about the shift in person.  I think the ending is SMASHINGLY good.


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09/11/2018 6:35 pm  

Love the diversity of the poem 


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09/11/2018 6:39 pm  

This reminds me somewhat of a dog being hungry and wanting food.

 


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09/11/2018 6:40 pm  

The wording from this poem is really interesting, i like it you did a really great job


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09/11/2018 6:49 pm  

nice wording


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16/11/2018 6:37 pm  

Nice  like all the details


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