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06/11/2018 7:04 pm  

sits quietly on couch,

wide-eyed

stuck in mess

isn't what it would be 

glad they got some sense

saw you shove 

before punching you 

neglected to tell 

 

the shove,

the neglecting

but either way,

guilty.

 

rush of love 

stepping to defend me 

I do expect 

to walk away

you're older,

bigger person

he starts

every time!

not fair

she holds hand up

No

I don't care

or what you've resort to,

you live here,

follow rules

Clear?

 

Dead to You 

By: Lisa McMann

Page 190 


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06/11/2018 7:06 pm  

The words flow.


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06/11/2018 9:03 pm  

What a powerful story you found.  I think stanza breaks will help the reader (and your story) understand the "players" in the poem.  Well done.


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08/11/2018 6:38 pm  

i love the form you wrote this i think it complimented the words very well. loved reading it


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09/11/2018 6:37 pm  

Love how well this tells a story.


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09/11/2018 6:37 pm  

Love how well this tells a story.


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09/11/2018 6:37 pm  

Love how well this tells a story.


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09/11/2018 6:40 pm  

I like how that the girl is saying she is invisible to the guy.


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