Hurling Ever Forward
A pre-dawn run on the trail,
just an hour,
pokes us, mocks us,
retching free moisture
through every pore.
Your antibiotics
require avoidance
of the sun. Check.
Yet the earth is still warm
from yesterday’s baking
and at the turn-around,
as you rid yourself
of last night’s dinner,
at my feet,
a leaf,
a tilapia filet,
a rack of ribs.
–T.A. Sukany 29 Aug 2018
I like this poem! I liked the vivid imagery of the last stanza. I also liked the idea of the “turnaround” being used twice in stanza 3 as well, once named, and the other inferred by the poem’s ending. I also like how the poem is written in 3rd person POV…I feel it adds more to the poem than if it was written in first person.
What is the “pokes us” and “mocks us” (stanza 1 line 3) were swapped? To me, I would see someone mocking someone before touching.
I didn´t really get it, I don´t understand poems very much, but good job I guess.
someone threw up their dinner after a long trip.
I am neutral about it
I guess u did good at not being straight forward with puking
I like how you wrote a poem but I do not understand it.
I think you did really good on your poem.
I think you did really good on your poem
I liked how the character puked but you didn’t make it obvious.
I like that I was actually able to understand this poem and the imagery it gives.
I really liked how at the end you said what the person ate, made me hungry.
ive heard better
I liked how you put the last part about someone trowing up on your feet.
This poem was interesting, it captures many different descriptions and elements. I enjoyed the descriptions of the poem, but i do not like stories about puking.
I liked it. It was a really interesting how you fraised everything.
I really enjoyed this poem and how everything was described.
good job professor Sukany i really liked it
This is a very interesting poem, nice work. I did not understand at all until the class discussed the poem. Gross but intelligent visual of vomit.
It was good. at first I thought someone was at home sick but when explained i could see the part about the run.
I thought it was good I like how you went into details.
I like the way this is wrote.
I like the varied vocabulary and that the words weren’t so dull and usual. It helps this poem stand out.
I loved this poem! It spoke to me because I love to run and I understood it perfectly!
i loved this poem it was so amazingly great